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News writing: writing great quotes

9/3/2014

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News writing: writing great quotes
by Joanna Liu, Editor-in-Chief of Voice K

When I first introduced news writing to a group of 7- to 15-year-old students, I talked about the importance of using good quotes in their stories. Then when their assignments were due, I found many articles that looked like transcripts, consisting of several very long quotes.

I find writing quotes to be the most challenging concept for a young writer to comprehend. That is totally understandable, because writing good quotes is one of the most challenging aspects of journalism writing. I am also constantly reading and learning to write better quotes myself, so I gathered some tips that I found useful. Most tips are selected points from Bob Baker’s blog on a vocabulary list for editors and reporters on which I’ve expanded a little, and added some examples.

What is a quote in news writing?

A quote is written words copied from a text or speech. Basically it is about recording what people have spoken. A quote is different from a transcript; while a quote is often embedded in the story to illustrate a point, a transcript is just a record of exactly what is said.

A news article sometimes needs quotes because:

  1. It repeats the exact words people said and reduces the mistakes in reporting.
  2. It can give readers different point of views while the writer stays neutral.
  3. It can make your story lively and make readers feel like they are at the event themselves.  
Although quotes can make a story come to life, overuse of or poorly chosen quotes can also kill a good story. Here are some points to remember:

KEEP ‘EM SHORT AND POWERFUL

Bob Baker’s blog on a vocabulary list for editors and reporters said that we should think of quotes as the spices, the seasoning in your story. You should avoid having your sources drone on and on. A great tip to write a short, powerful quote is to use the ones you remember off the top of your head, and then check for accuracy later. These quotes are usually more emotional, leaving a permanent mark on reader’s mind. 



Your quote should not be more than 3-4 lines long. 

The other long, rambling, vague, or obvious quotes should be cut off or paraphrased.


DON’T ANNOUNCE THE QUOTE:

Announcing a quote is a waste of space and the reader’s time.

Example: Jonathan said that he could not remember the last time he got a good grade, “I’ve not gotten anything better than a C in many years,” he said.

It is repetitive. If you are going to tell your story in a quote, then let your quote do the job. If you think it is better to paraphrase or summarize it, then do so without the quote.


AVOID TALKING HEADS

Talking heads are faceless, personality-less people, speaking quotes in a story. We usually get a name, a title and a long, pointless quote from the talking heads. Some writers include them to show different reactions or convince an editor that many people were interviewed.

For example:

“I really like the rides here,” 6-year-old Jason Smith said.

“This is a great festival before school starts, I will come next year,” said Jason’s mom.

“I volunteer because it is fun and to gain some experience,” said Jenny Worth, a volunteer at the festival.


As Baker’s article phrases it: “Reading one of these stories is like going to a big party and shaking hands with 100 people, but getting to know no one.”

So the best practice is to go back and search for those most memorable moments, then develop those moments into a great quote with great description.  

For example:

“I really like the rides here,” says 6-year-old Jason Smith as he charges into the bouncy arena with his balloon sword. This is Smith’s first time playing at a bouncy castle. He will be entering Grade 1 in September, and his mom thinks the festival is a great way to kick off a new school year.


CHANGE OUT-OF-TIME QUOTES TO IN-TIME QUOTES

Out-of-time quotes are quotes spoken to a reporter. The reader is reminded that he is reading a newspaper story. IN-TIME quotes make the reader feel in the midst of the story as it happened.

Example:

“The mayor told me right before his speech that he had forgotten his notes,” press secretary Bob Berg said.

An in-time quote about the same moment would read:

“Goddamn it,” the mayor muttered to his press aide moments before the speech began, “I forgot my notes.” (example from a vocabulary list for editors and reporters)

I hope these tips help. Here is a little assignment: try to rewrite the paragraph / quotes below to get rid of the long quotes:

“What inspired you to be in the race?” I asked.

“My dad and I used to always go rowing when I was your age and we did the same in Boy scouts too.” Hudson says. I asked him about the most challenging part of the dragon boat race. “The important part about racing is that everyone has to be in sync and you have to make sure you gotta listen to the man in the back and everyone on the boat has to know his instructions so you wanna start paddling very hard at the start, slow down in the middle, and then pick up at the end and you always have to be in sync. So that’s the hardest part.”(example from a young journalist)

See ourdragon boat race article to read the final version.


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Effective Email Communication Tips for Kids

10/23/2013

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Effective Email Communication Tips 

1. Subject lines are headlines

Previously, we have learned about newspaper style writing. A newspaper headline has two functions: It grabs your attention, and it tells you what the article is about, so that you can decide if you want to read further. Same with the email subject lines! Make sure your subject matches the content of your email, so the reader knows exactly what the email is about. It is ridiculous for a newspaper to publish an article without headlines, so don’t ever send an email without a subject line!

Bad Example: 

Subject: My Article!

Good Example:

Subject: My fake news article from Oct 5 journalist class

2. Address people appropriately and sign off your name

An email without a proper address looks rude and rushed. When you send out an email, you need to know who your audience is. If you are talking to your friend, you may be casual with a “Hey George,” to start. If you are talking to your teacher, you may start with “Hello Ms. McLean,”

When you finish your email, it is best to sign off with your name and title, so your reader knows exactly who you are.

For example:

George Wu

Your Journalist Training Student –Richmond Hill

 
3. Specify date, time, location and event

When you are writing an email talking about a specific date, time, or event, you need to make sure the content of your email remind people about it. Lack of any specific information may confuse your reader or make it look like a spam.

Bad Example:

Hello Joanna,

I would like to go to the kite event, please sign me up!

George.

Good Example:

Hello Joanna,

I would like to sign up for the Burlington Kite Festival event on Sunday, June 2, 2013, located at Brant Hills Community Park. I am planning to arrive at 11:00 am. Please let me know if I have got the spot at your earliest convenience.

Thank you.

George Wu.

4. Specify the response you want

Sometimes, you want include a call-to-action at the end of your email, whether it is booking an appointment or asking for advice. You need to be as specific about your request.

Bad Example:

Hello Joanna,

Did you get my article from last week? Please check!

Thanks.

 Good Example: 

Hello Joanna,

Have you received my article regards to the Zombie Walk in Toronto? I sent it out on Friday, Nov 1st. I would like to know your views on it. Can we talk about it after our next training seminar on Sunday, Nov. 9. Please let me know if this would work.

Thanks,

George.

 

5. Proofread and edit before you hit send

It is always good to proofread your email before you send, this will avoid simple mistakes. The first place to look is always the name of the recipient. Make sure the names are spelled correctly.  Then check your grammar, avoid simple mistakes such as misspelling “there” as “their”.

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Building Characters in a Story

9/25/2013

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Building Characters in a Story

A character is a person depicted in a narrative or drama. When people like a story, it is usually because they like the characters in the story. Creating a vivid and interesting character will help your story leave a memorable impression on your readers.


Create a Character Sketch!

A character sketch is a descriptive piece of writing that focuses on a dominant impression of a person. The character sketch uses many lively details to support this impression.


Direction: Make up a character (could be based on a friend, a mysterious stranger or a memorable person from a movie or book) and write a character sketch about that person.


Follow the steps:



1.  What is the overall impression of that person you want to express?
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2.  Describe the person’s physical characteristics, including clothing, movements and facial expressions. 
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3.  Write down some important facts about your character’s past. 
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4. What would your character say? Show your character’s personality through their own words.
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5. Describe the character’s opinions and typical activities. 
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6. Show the character in action by describing an experience the character had. 
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7. Describe how others feel about the character. 
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8 . Now that you have all the information, organize it in such a way that will help your readers to see your character vividly.

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Example: 

By Edward Wang (Age 8) 


Josh was born in Barcelona. He is a “brave” 17-year-old teenager. His parents were so surprised when he was born: he already had lots of hair! Josh has blue eyes, white skin and green hair. He has a big secret that only his best friend, Jake, knows. 


No matter what the weather is like, he always wears a red jacket and black pants. When he travels from one country to another, he always goes by helicopter. No matter what he needs to do, where ever he is, he will never leave Jake alone. He was successful at robbing eight banks in Italy and twelve in the United States. He has also escaped jail. 


Just for emergencies, he keeps a pet lion at his secret laboratory. He sometimes says to himself, “I will get a pet shark one day!”Josh thinks he will never ever get caught by the police. Every morning, he tells his minions to rob as many banks as they can. In the meantime, he builds more and more weapons as well as robot minions. If the cops ever found him, he would call his flame dragon and minions to attack the cops. Not many people know about Josh’s true identity, but his minions say he rocks!

      

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10 Tips for Writing an Article 

1/29/2013

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1. Before you start writing, brainstorm ideas of what you want to include in your article. Write an outline with these points included, so that when you start writing your draft you will have an idea of what you want to say and in what order.

2. When you are thinking about what to include in the article, try to imagine what the reader will want to know about your topic. For example, if you are writing an article about a new iPod, your reader might be asking themselves questions like: “What makes this iPod different from the last one?”; “What kind of features does it have?”; “Where can I get it and how much is it?”; “Is it worth the money?”; and “When does it come out?”.

3. Try to come up with a strong first sentence. This will be the sentence that convinces the reader that they want to read the rest of the article, so try to catch their attention.

4. Make sure that your paragraphs are not too long, so that the reader does not lose interest.

5. If you can interview someone about your topic, that’s great. Including quotations from different people will make your article more interesting.

6. Include real examples of what you are trying to say. If you like something, why did you like it? Can you tell a story that helps to explain why you feel that way? What makes your experience unique?

7. For articles about community events or new trends, make sure to tell the readers when and where they can enjoy the experience or product – for example, if you are writing about a play you should include when and where it is taking place, or if you are writing about fashion you should include a store where that look can be found.

8. At the end of the article make sure to write one or two concluding sentences. In this conclusion you can summarize what your main points were. A good conclusion is one that will make the reader remember what they just read.

9. Think of a title. Sometimes it can be easier to think of the title last, because you now know exactly what your article is trying to get across. The title should be catchy, to the point, and let the reader know what the article is about.

10. Once you are finished the draft of your article, try reading it out loud to yourself. This will help you catch mistakes, and make sure that the article flows well.

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